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For You, My Queen
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“Don’t you dare believe that I would pardon you for this sin!” Hollered the High Ruler.  “You evil witch! You have betrayed my trust and slain my king!”
“You’ve only yourself to blame! You knew I vehemently opposed his beliefs—that fool of a man. You’ve known how much I’ve despised him. Yet all this time, you’ve kept me so close, closer even than him, your own husband and king. And you’ve always regarded my advice like word from the Gods!” A lady with frightfully dark eyes and a split tongue spat back at the High Ruler. “He had too much power. Power that is rightfully yours, My Queen. He would have destroyed this country!”
“That was not your call to make, Veda!” Screamed the High Ruler.
“Ranee—”
“Do not call me by my first name, you traitor!”
“Ranee! It is my call to make.” Veda stared her queen in the eyes. Queen Ranee’s eyes were as light as Veda’s were dark. They were like honey glistening in the light of a cloudless summer morning. “I foresaw the destruction he would have hailed upon this kingdom. And as my duties entail, I ensured the survival of this land and its people. And most importantly, your safety and your happiness.”
Ranee suddenly felt as though she had been plunged into icy water. A shiver ran up her spine, her teeth chattered, and her head cooled. It grew even colder and colder as she stared into Veda’s eyes—Veda’s dark, cool, ever-loving eyes. She had trusted them so much. Trusted? Now, why was that past tense? Had something happened? Ranee envisioned the face of a lovely looking man—a crowned prince, ever so handsome, somehow familiar, but without a clue as to his identity. Who’s he? She continued to gaze into Veda’s eyes. Veda had always been by her side, always protected her and been there when she needed her. Veda… Veda… Veda… Why are you doing this?
“For you, My Queen.”
Veda’s image remained gentle as the iciness numbed Ranee’s fingers, toes, and chilled her to the bone. “Ranee… Ranee…” Veda’s voice called out softly and faintly.
“Ranee…” Ranee shot straight up. She was in her bed, comfortable and warm beneath her covers. Her High Priestess—a messenger of the Gods, clairvoyant and all-knowing, and Head Consultant of the High Ruler—sat calmly on her bedside, smiling brightly at her. Her dark eyes were so wise Ranee could almost see the universe within them. “There you are, my Queen. Did you sleep well?”
“Y-yes.” Ranee stammered out confusedly. She put her hand over her heart; it was beating fast, almost anxiously. Ranee tried for a moment to remember a dream she had had. It had terrified her, but she couldn’t recall anything of it.
“Are you feeling alright, my Queen?” Veda put a hand to her forehead. Ranee flinched for a moment, but couldn’t understand why. However, Veda hadn’t missed it and withdrew her hand, her mouth pulling down gloomily at the corners. “Maybe a little more rest would suit you well.” Cooed Veda. “Don’t sleep for too long though. We have plenty of work to do!”
A sudden though tickled Ranee into a smile. “If I had a king, the agenda might move along a little faster.” She joked at Veda, suddenly feeling much more herself.
“A king, my Queen? Why would such a strong and brilliant High Ruler such as yourself ever need one of those silly things?” Veda teased at her.
Ranee laughed. “Why are you so good, Veda?”
“For you, My Queen.”
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I felt like writing a short story. This is about an hour's worth of work, certainly nothing fantastic.
I do believe I'm going to start a series of short stories, completely unrelated though.

Interpret as you wish, though I would love to hear what you come up with, so comment if you have an idea!
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Shackis Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely story! I liked it wery much!

how I interpreted the story is that renee had a dream/premonition of another dimension/other life. that veda betrayed her (I don't realy think she betrayed her, but renee does :|) actuly happended but in a parallel universe that she can't interact with (she shouldn't even know about it). which is the reason for her not remebering her "dream", but though her conscinces doesn't remeber it her subconscinces does. because she had some kind of conetion with the other renee. which explains why renee flinching when veda touched her and mentionig having a king. 

at least that what I tought :dummy: 
again, great work! :clap:
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NoxSatuKeir Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013
Cool interpretations! Thanks for sharing. 
And thank you, I'm glad you liked it! :heart:
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themeepynerd Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love the open-endedness to the story. I enjoyed reading this. :3
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NoxSatuKeir Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013
Yay! Thank you! :heart: I'm glad you liked it. 
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sumgie1 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
What is probably the most interesting to me about this story is how it seems to put into light this conflict between loyalty/care and respect of authority/duty. It makes you wonder which is really the best way to go... :)
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NoxSatuKeir Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
I know, even I was conflicted when writing it! I would personally say that I favor the loyalty/care spectrum over the authority/duty. That also may be why when I started writing it, I had created Veda first and made her the focal point in my mind. Ranee was created second and she could almost be anybody to me... 
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superpopcorn101 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very good. I'm glad I took the time to read it. I love how there are so many different ways you can interpret it. Wonderful writing, I wish I had such skill.
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NoxSatuKeir Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D And I do like to leave a lot of my writings open for interpretation. You can see the same thing happening with some of my poems. :heart: 
And I've just been practicing writing whatever comes into my head. Even if it doesn't seem like something that could unfold into a greater story. 
And most of my skill has probably been gained through practicing writing poems and fiction as well as the fact that I have to write a lot of evil papers for my classes. >.<
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Willdabeast-0305 Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Intriguing. Feels like it could be a stand-alone short story, or an excerpt from a novel or novella. It's hard to tell if the dream was just the queen's imagination and Veda really is good, or if it's a premonition of events yet to come.

I have a suggestion concerning dialog tags: When you have long lines of speech, place the dialog nearer to the beginning of the dialog. For instance, I would make the following suggestion on the second paragraph:
“You’ve only yourself to blame!" A lady with frightfully dark eyes and a split tongue spat back at the High Ruler." You knew I vehemently opposed his beliefs—that fool of a man. You’ve known how much I’ve despised him. Yet all this time, you’ve kept me so close, closer even than him, your own husband and king. And you’ve always regarded my advice like word from the Gods! He had too much power. Power that is rightfully yours, My Queen. He would have destroyed this country!”
(I didn't change any of the wording, just moved the dialog tag to immediately after the first sentence.)
The reason being that the reader needs know who is talking while they read the dialog as much as possible, so they can visualize the scene more clearly-- and this case in particular because it is the first time Veda is described. If we don't know that the speaker is a woman with dark eyes and a spit tongue (literal? metaphoric?), and says this vehemently enough for words to be described as "spat" rather than regularly spoken, then we are just reading words without the right images to go with them.
For all my rambling, I hope I made some sense of all that.

But again, very good. You give a clear enough glimpse into the scene and setting that not only allows me to visualize and understand it, but also makes me want to know more.
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sumgie1 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
This suggestion makes a lot of sense to me. :)
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