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The clock struck nine
The illusion of a beautiful woman

What madness can this be?
She is calling out to me
My name… my name on her lustful lips
And now my hands pressed on her hips
Oh! Her smile! Her caress!
That croon which must be blessed!

The clock struck ten
The temptations of a temptress

This woman, so beautiful in every way,
With my heart, she does recklessly play
Her eyes so dark, yet brightly glowing
Her hair so soft and gently flowing
Her skin so silky cannot be soiled
But to the touch, is so deathly cold

The clock struck eleven
The prayer without the belief

What this gorgeous being is, I don't bother
Yet hold silent prayer to our heavenly father
But now's not the time to worry with such strife
For tonight may be the rest of my ungodly life
My heart beats profoundly in my chest
"I love you" my words solemnly confessed

The clock struck twelve
The love of a man unloved

"Of course you do" my love left unreturned
But with her so near, I was unconcerned
Her breath on my neck and teeth at my throat
I let her conquer me as my life she smote
I fell away… away from the love I once sought
My life drained from me in a battle un-fought

The chimes of the clock beckoned forth night
And the man unloved gave up without fight
The illusion of a beautiful woman faded from sight
And all was still and all was right
I felt inspired.
As much as I'd love to talk about this poem, I feel that telling people what I think it means would not be as profound as having them come up with a meaning of their own.

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MrsKyoya Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconclappingplz: Amzazing imagery and flow :heart:
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NoxSatuKeir Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Thank you! :heart:
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deviant-by-silence Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
Beautiful poem! It really speaks with a voice of its own
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NoxSatuKeir Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
Thank you!! :heart: I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D

Sorry for the late response though!! D:
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tattoofuzzy Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
I really enjoyed this! I had several ideas that cropped up through your words. Very well written, I loved the imagery.
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NoxSatuKeir Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :heart:

Sorry for the late response, by the way.
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tattoofuzzy Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
You're welcome. It's ok.
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Dj-Is-Era Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
I like it. You did a great job telling a story with this poem, and in free verse as well.
Free verse can be good, bad, alright, etc. That you did good with it shows that you put thought into the poem, and, of course, it shows.

Great job overall, you can be sure that I'll follow your works and give you my two cents whenever I have the chance.

Keep up the great work!

If you have any ideas that you'd like to share, or go over and talk about, or even a poem trade on an idea, I'd be happy to do that as well.

I wrote poems as well, with some short stories, etc. and would be thrilled to start expanding and finding talented authors on DeviantArt.

-Dj
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NoxSatuKeir Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
Thank you so much for your feedback!! :heart:
I love writing! Even if I don't always have the time to.

By the way, sorry for the super late response!! D: I've got a lot of stuff in my inbox and I've been busy outside of dA, so I didn't get to it until late!!
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HarleKlown Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I sense vampires. :iconsmartyplz:
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